Finished Wedding song for daughter

[surfnorthwest]

As some of might remember my daughter won a dream wedding a few weeks ago and will be getting married next year. She asked if I could write a song for her day and I just got it done. I was going to sing om it but when I started I sounded like a pig with its balls in a vice. So since I can tell her I love her the song needs no words, the music is from the heart.

I will playit for the first dance, let me know what you guys think.

Savannah's Wedding.mp3

Guitars - Carvin Ultra VC, Goding LGx-SA
Bass - Carin ICON 5
Amp - Marshall Vintage Modern
Drums - Yamaha
Sax-Roland
Keys - Roland - Korg

[spooky joe]

Lovely vibe and tones man. Shame there a no words. Do you have lyrics for the song?
I know how you feel tho' , really wish I could hold a tune.
Cheers

[teddy07x]

really good tune. :)

[slowpokerhino]

I really like it Surf. The drums bother me though. Don't seem to fit. A different kit maybe?

[surfnorthwest]

The drums bother me though. Don't seem to fit. A different kit maybe?

Is it the rythem or the sound of the drums, rythem I can't do much with this late in the game although I can add some rolls, one hits, and crashes. The tone of the drums I can shape with some VSTs I have, What do you think?

[slowpokerhino]

I'd say it's the "style" of the drums. Can you change it to a "jazz" or "acoustic" kit? Pushing it a little further back in the mix may do the trick. Sorry, I do tend to over analize these things.

[bluesbrother]

I like the drums though.But since there is no voice i would use a les paul with a very strong
lead sound to replace it (ala carlos santana would fit this song nicely) I think the guitar sound is
to thin and low in volume (compared to the rest of the song).Before 2.00 min it is kinda dull after
2.00 with keyboards and saxaphone(?) it sounds so much better.
Very nice song but like i said i would use a strong lead sound to replace a voice , now it sounds so
dreamy mellow which is nice but on a wedding a strong lead sound would spice things up and bring more happy
emotion to the public.
My little girl is only 5 years old .I also do not sing too great( on my wedding a few months back they asked me to sing angel from robbie williams unprepared :? , ....that gave me some sweat )but she is a natural talent ( not just because she is
my daughter)But she is ashamed to sing in public but it sounds like michael jackson when he was 7.Really scary to hear
a 5 year old sing with so much emotion.I do not encourage her in any way but hopes she will use this gift well.
If she ever gets married ( luckily for me that is far away) i would be honoured if she asked me to play!!
HAVE A NICE WEDDING DAY,SURF.